Let Tom Swift Inform Your Writing
By Carolyn Howard-Johnson
Ever heard of Tom Swifties?
Maybe you're too young to be familiar with the classic Tom Swift adventures for boys. Or maybe you're a girl who never read a Tom Swift book nor cares to.
Tom Swifties are one-line jokes lampooning the style of Victor Appleton, the author of the original Tom Swift books. People started making jokes about his overuse of adverbs and the unnecessary taglines he wrote into his dialogue. Like the Polish jokes, they were so much fun that a whole series of them became available for pun aficionados. The author of these classics, of course, laughed all the way to the bank. But that's a lesson for one of my marketing seminars, not this article on writing and editing.
Tom Swifties were then. This is now. I haven't dared read the new books in the Tom Swift series but I assume that this outdated writing has been eliminated from them.
You'll want to minimize tags and adverbs in your writing, too!
An example from one of the Swift books will suffice to let you know what to watch for. (Thank you to Roy Peter Clark for the example.)
"'Look!' suddenly exclaimed Ned. 'There's the agent now!...I'm going to speak to him!' impulsively declared Ned.'"
Even authors who swear that adverbs are always very, very good things to use and are reluctant to give up their clever taglines can see how, well . . . .awful this is. In fact, I have to reassure people the quotation is real! Some of the writing that comes to the desks of agents and editors looks almost as bad. Here's how you can make sure yours doesn't:
1. Use taglines only when one is necessary for the reader to know who is speaking.
2. Almost always choose "he said" or "she said" over anything too cute, exuberant, or wordy like "declared" and "exclaimed."
3. Cut the "ly" words ruthlessly, not only in dialogue tags but everywhere.
Hint for nonfiction writers: Dialogue and anecdotes can improve your writing. Journalists have begun to use these techniques in their new stories because they’ve begun to realize that they enhance readability. The trick is to know what you’re doing and knowing just a few of the rules for dialogue can make a difference.
You will find specific techniques for strengthening your writing in the process of eliminating adverbs in The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward to Avoid Humiliation and Ensure Success (www.budurl.com/TheFrugalEditor). This book will also give you some computer tricks for making these edits easy. Until then, take Nike's advice and "Just do it!"
Carolyn Howard-Johnson, award-winning author of The Frugal Book Promoter: How to Do What Your Publisher Won't (www.budurl.com/FrugalBkPromo) and The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward to Avoid Humiliation and Ensure Success (www.budurl.com/TheFrugalEditor) . The former is the winner of USA Book News "Best Professional Book" award and the Book Publicists of Southern California's coveted Irwin Award. The Frugal Editor is a USA Book News winner and a Reader Views Literary Award winner. The promotion campaign for it won the New Generation Marketing Award. Learn more at www.HowToDoItFrugally.com. Learn more about editing at www.thefrugaleditor.blogspot.com.
